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Fortunes of War

 

Doing the weekly supermarket shop,

He saw the cashier had just the one leg.

‘Landmine?’ he asked. ‘You’ve guessed it,’ she replied.

The man behind them pointed to his patch:

‘I was at the front. They shot out my eye.’

Still, mustn’t grumble. My friend and brother died.’

The queue went quiet; the scanner beeped on.

A woman entered, carrying a child,

Apparently deceased. ‘We’re on your side,’

She kept mumbling, in broken dialect.

‘She looks like a ghost,’ the cashier exclaimed.

‘I’ve seen her,’ the man said, ‘running, wild-eyed,

Dodging bullets to lay blooms at the grave.’

My subject gasped: ‘And I thought we were brave.’

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Stephen Gospage

Tue 27th Jun 2023 08:08

My thanks to Stephen and Kevin for the comments. They are greatly appreciated.

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Stephen Atkinson

Sun 25th Jun 2023 12:31

Powerfully understated. Brilliant, as usual, Stephen 👏

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Stephen Gospage

Sat 24th Jun 2023 17:05

I continue to be overwhelmed by the generous comments on this series of war poems. Although I feel sad, and often angry, when I write one of these poems, I have shared some of them with Ukrainians (include some of those I help teach English to in the evening) and the response has usually been positive and understanding.

All the comments keep me going and inspire me to write on on this subject.

So thanks to Greg, Keith, John, KJ, Uilleam and Manish for your comments and to Nigel, Tom, Hugh, Your Royal Poetess, Pete, Michael, Stella and Rudyard.

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Manish Singh Rajput

Sat 24th Jun 2023 15:40

Brilliant stuff, Stephen. Conversational, impactful and very well written.🌻

Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Sat 24th Jun 2023 09:40

Thanks once again Stephen. This is a truly harrowing and haunting piece-pun intended.
This reminds me of a poem I read a while back, but I can't for the life of me remember who the author is.

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kJ Walker

Sat 24th Jun 2023 08:35

Keep up the good work Stephen.
You are fast becoming the number one in this genre.

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John Botterill

Fri 23rd Jun 2023 21:16

Stunning, Stephen, in both content and delivery. Stunning 😔

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keith jeffries

Fri 23rd Jun 2023 09:37

Stephen, your adopted theme of war poetry grows more into the realities of war and its consequences. As we sit far away from the conflict we need these poems to jolt us out of our complacency into a world where tragedy is an everyday occurrence. I pray that you will be inspired to write more such poems as they contribute to the overall war effort. Bless you for this,
Thanks
Keith

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Greg Freeman

Fri 23rd Jun 2023 08:52

You fight on, Steve. And well done for doing so. Thank you for making us face this continuing reality in Ukraine with another almost unbearable poem. You deserve a poetry medal.

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