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Lambs to the Slaughter

Thank you for the birthday golf balls, Adam and Scarlett.

Sorry they are all lost!

 

Ripped away from their cardboard womb,

Shimmering, naked, on the kitchen table,

Pristine, proud, and blindingly new,

They shake off their naïve foetal slumber,

Rolling off their shiny wooden green,

Onto the rough of the kitchen floor.

 

Like soldiers from the First World War,

Quickly ensuring that their pluck is seen,

Soon savagely depleted in their number,

Where, sadly, the many became the few:

The lost, the crippled, the scuffed and disabled.

Not many shots before their golf ball tomb.

 

 

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◄ From a glint in your eye

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John Botterill

Sun 3rd Sep 2023 10:04

Thanks Stephen. Yes biros! Can be a nightmare just when one has the idea for the final line haha😂

Electric limits to their widest senses!

That's a pretty good one!

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Stephen Gospage

Sat 2nd Sep 2023 13:34

Very well written, John. I have the same problem with biros.

'The Wires' - marvellous poem.

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John Botterill

Fri 1st Sep 2023 16:01

Thanks Reggie's Ghost . I counted four empty boxes in my Hall! I never find them with the alacrity that I lose them!!!
I borrowed the pattern from Larkin poem 'Wires' which is well worth a read, I would say. 😁
Thanks for the like, John.

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Reggie's Ghost

Fri 1st Sep 2023 12:54

John, only just spotted the rhyming pattern. Excellent! Is there an official name for it?

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Reggie's Ghost

Fri 1st Sep 2023 12:07

I know how you feel John. On a new course, with narrow fairways and lots of water one can easily lose half a box of balls. Though as a golfer, family members are never stuck for what to buy you!

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