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From a glint in your eye

It began as a sparkle, a mere glint of the eye,

Rolling down your cheek, with a hint of emotion,

A misty water vapour, from cloud in your sky,

Filling broad streams in those mountains up high.

 

On a fast, rolling river, surging deep and wide,

I cascade, uncontrolled, on a white-water ride,

At the mercy of rocks on the Severn Bore tide,

I hurtle past speedboats on this river of love,

Bypassing safe harbour on my way to the sea.

The coastguard is alerted, helicopters above.

A grown man has gone missing; believed to be me!

 

I have laid myself prostrate, as an act of devotion,

Held aloft by some driftwood I found floating by,

Adrift on the tide of a vast swelling ocean,

An ocean of love, from a tear in your eye.

 

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John Botterill

Thu 31st Aug 2023 11:33

Thank you, MC. Much appreciated 😀

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 30th Aug 2023 16:21

Adroit use of language combined with emotive imagery do their
job here in fine style.

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John Botterill

Tue 29th Aug 2023 08:23

Thanks so much Manish and Stephen. Your encouragement means such a great deal to me. Thanks Clare, Purplemoon, Kevin and K. Lynn for the likes. 😀
I have had a summer break but I vow to active on WOL henceforth 😁

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Stephen Gospage

Tue 29th Aug 2023 07:14

I found this very moving, John, and also enjoyable. It is very well written, as Manish says.

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Manish Singh Rajput

Mon 28th Aug 2023 11:41

This is so beautiful written, John B. I imagined myself there as I read it. A masterpiece as always, my friend!
Thank you.

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