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Very Much Alive

‘It’s been over a decade,’

My aunt often mentions,

Although it seems

Like yesterday,

Watching them walk

Together in the

Shopping arcade.

 

There’s immeasurable

Amount of anger

And insecurity,

But there’s no hatred.

My uncle often says,

‘I should’ve given it

Another chance instead.

 

They haven’t seen

Each other since

Their agreed, mutual

Decision of separation,

That bitter moment

Has had continual

Reverberation.

 

Two people adamant

On being away

In distance,

But hearts still

Eager to cross

The fence;

 

Their love had

Taken a deep dive,

But it had gills,

It breathes and

Is very much alive.

 

She still keeps him

In her name,

And he still gazes

At their wedding frame.

 

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Manish Singh Rajput

Sat 8th Jun 2024 12:58

Thank you very much, Stephen, it means a lot coming from you!😊
I somehow tend to adapt to concise style of writing when I write about sadness just so that I don't drift away into trivial matters (something that I often used to do before).

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Stephen Gospage

Sat 8th Jun 2024 09:00

This is outstanding, Manish. The concise style somehow heightens the feeling of sadness, with its residue of consolation.

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Manish Singh Rajput

Sat 8th Jun 2024 07:01

Thank you Tim and Martin, for your kind comments, it means a lot to me. And thanks to all those who liked this, they're very much appreciated!😊

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Martin Peacock

Fri 7th Jun 2024 19:54

That last stanza is bittersweetly true. Nicely said.

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Tim Higbee

Fri 7th Jun 2024 16:44

I like the phrasing, the sense of separated yet connected. Love and compatibility only from a distance. True, but sad. Your ability to conceptualize and express an emotion is always right on my friend.

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