Will they remember me
It's strange to think of where the ripple will stop when i die
i don't think its a big pond
but i ponder what my old school friends would say
"what a shame"
and go about their day
would i pop into their mind a decade away?
would any of them have any regrets and wanted me to stay?
I won't know so i don't know why i fill my head with such questions
maybe sit by my graveside and tell me the answers
Rolph David
Tue 7th Jan 2025 19:10
Hi Luna,
Your poem is deeply moving, capturing the universal human longing to understand our impact and how we are remembered. The reflective tone and the poignant questions about memory and regret are beautifully expressed. However, I must say, your consistent use of the lowercase "i" stands out in a way that detracts from the otherwise strong emotional resonance of the piece. But I love your masterpiece!