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Breaking the ice

I am standing on this corner

With two coffees hoping she will turn up

The girl I finally asked out

The one I finally managed to speak to

Say hi do you fancy grabbing a coffee sometime

I am wondering whether she will Still

Be the same girl as yesterday

The one with spring in her eyes

And summer in her hair

Will she notice the stains on my coat

And the stutter on my lips

Is she caught in traffic

Or is this a part of some elaborate joke

Will I scare her off with my stories

Of someone I once knew

Who looked just like her

Or will she walk right passed me anyway

Will I stop shaking

Looking desperate as if I need a smoke or a drink

Do I tell her that she looks pretty

And I have watched her for a year

Or does that sound kind of creepy

Does she really want to see me

Or is she just being polite

 

Hi there really sorry I am late

I’m not trying to play it cool

I was wondering hoping that you would still be here

And not brush me off

Because I talk too much when I’m nervous

Should I explain that I have been waiting for

You to ask me out for about a year

Should I mention the stain on your coat

Or just pretend it’s not there

I know I’m kind of flaky

And would not blame you if you ran

But you seem kind of nice

So, I am pleased that you finally broke the ice

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◄ A tale of two places

A pocket full of secrets ►

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Martin Elder

Sun 23rd Mar 2025 15:11

Red brick Hugh Stephen and Holden. Thank you for the likes

Flyntland I am glad you like the perspective I do try to achieve that but don't always achieve it

Thanks Marla I am glad you found it relatable it can be difficult at times to write a piece that is understood in such a way

Ray I take you point with this piece. I guess I was trying to look at the innocence of youth which I still believe exists for many today but is so easily missed by the apparently more newsworthy messed up lives. Also my wife says I am a romantic and a dreamer which I am happy to own

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raypool

Fri 21st Mar 2025 16:36

A bit of adolescence creeping in I reckon Martin. So many long marriages might have started in this fashion that it is believable with the benefit of age!

Ray

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Marla Joy

Thu 20th Mar 2025 17:44

This poem tells a story anyone can relate to. Nice. Marla

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Flyntland

Thu 20th Mar 2025 17:05

I really like this endearing poem - written from an unusual perspective - it makes for interesting. reading.

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