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Dotted Line

‘Your country needs you!’

Came the breathless whine,

As we put our names

On the dotted line.

 

Everyone went;

We all joined the queue.

No questions were asked.

None of us knew

 

About proper war;

We weren’t playing games:

Grenades in an ambush,

A tank crew in flames.

 

Although we were told

That problems were shared,

It soon became clear

That nobody cared.

 

Though we have returned

With barely a mark,

Some didn’t survive

This requisite lark.

 

We pray for them daily,

We ponder their fate,

But such curiosity

Has come far too late.

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Flyntland

Mon 24th Mar 2025 20:51

having read your poem I can't help but think about those old photos. of the 'Palls' before they went off together, to fight together, and be killed together.
They were sad little groups of uneducated and underfed young men - these days they would be described as boys - looking unhappy and shocked and wearing ill-fitting uniforms, standing together in mean cobbled streets.

What cynical mind dreamed up that way of getting recruits?

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Stephen Gospage

Sun 23rd Mar 2025 17:06

Thank you for your kind comments and analysis of the poem, Rolph. I remember Larkin's take on the First World War call up : 'As if it were an August Bank Holiday lark'. Perhaps it seemed like that, for a while.

And thanks to everyone who liked this poem.

Rolph David

Sun 23rd Mar 2025 16:23

Stephen,
The way you describe the experience of signing up for war, filled with initial enthusiasm and a lack of understanding, effectively highlights the gap between expectation and reality. The shift from the excitement of enlistment to the harshness of combat is striking, especially in the lines about the violence and the abandonment felt by those who serve. The reflections on the aftermath, the survivors left to ponder the fate of those lost, add a poignant layer to the narrative. Your poem offers a powerful perspective on the personal toll of war, capturing both the immediate and long-term emotional impacts. Great work!
Cheers,
Rolph

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