SHATTERED AIR

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A yearning took root

My foolish heart exposed.

I gave in to wanting

Build castles of air

Watered my naive desires

Ignoring the whispers of doubt.

Then, the inevitable unraveling began.

The settling of the dust

The sudden frost

The withering of my petals

Leaving behind a bare stem.

Now, just the bare bones of what I was.

A hollow echo remains

A quiet shame settles in my chest.

The mistake of needing too much

Too much hope carried 

My vulnerability laid bare.

Then, a cold understanding dawns

Too much given, nothing returned 

A lesson etched in pain.

 

Foolish,yes. And utterly alone.

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Naomi

Sat 12th Apr 2025 15:26

Dear Rolph,

Your message is deeply appreciated.

It's wonderful to know that the poem resonated with you on such a profound level, and your interpretation of its themes is insightful. Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts so eloquently.

Best regards,

Naomi

Rolph David

Sat 12th Apr 2025 07:51

Dear Naomi,

What I like about "Shattered Air" is its striking reflection on the vulnerability that comes with desire and the pain of giving too much. Your imagery, from "castles of air" to the "withering of my petals," conveys the fragility of hope and the unravelling that inevitably follows. The "bare bones" and "hollow echo" are powerful symbols of the emptiness left when expectations fall short, and trust fades.
Your words beautifully convey the harsh clarity that arises when we realise we’ve given more than we’ve received. The "cold understanding" you speak of resonates deeply, as it reveals how vulnerability can sometimes lead to emotional depletion.
Thank you for sharing such a raw and reflective piece.
Best regards,
Rolph

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