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town planning committee club

order gentlemen

next item on agenda

application premises of 27 / 29

Stannard road     former site of

late Shop     plans proposed

by brewing-chain

Wetherspoons     develop units into

     gastro-pub

mister secretary?

                                                                            pen aint working

     hang on     I'll

just nip home and

get another one

 

...

 

order gentlemen

                         (ee are)

                                                                             kay

local residents opposed

                                                                             can't be bothered with this

                                                                             tonight

                                                                             worth carrying on just us?

                                                                             since Steve and McHugh left

                                                                             seem em

                                                                             with a casey

                                                                             earlier on     probably at fields

                                                                                  by now

gentlemen order! 

as was saying

                     local residents against

                                                                             too much like school

okay! so you think we should just let

another pub be built on this estate?!

is that what people need?

                                                                            don't care

                                                                            I don't wanner do school

                                                                            at night  

                                                                            gonner get that 75p Jimmy owes me

                                                                            then

                                                                            catch-up with the others

                                                                            for football

okay, get lost!

                                                                                                                                                   

 

◄ blackpool

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Comments

<Deleted User> (4988)

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 10:46

Hi, Zuzanna

Thanks for taking the time to read the poem and comment (thanks for yr other comment as well!)

The intention of the poem is pretty straightforward really: just to put forth my idea that town-planners are a little like kids playing with Lego blocks; and they often have about as much thought for the residents of cities as kids as well. Also I wanted to show opposing points of view re urban development - and that I've tried to articuate via the two different voices. Which brings me onto the form of the poem: it's scattered just to try and demonstrate the words are supposed to come from two, distinct voices. The form is also a tip of my cap to Charles Olson - one of my fave poets.

Cheers,
Richard.

<Deleted User> (4281)

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 07:39

HI, Richard

Interesting with the committee assignments; but what you have in mind to accomplish by those involved. Think this is quite thought provoking write. Why the structure of your poem is scattered all over the page? Is there any purpose for that - Just curious…?

Thank you,
Zuzanna

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