The Departure
I wish we could have met
under different circumstances.
I could have given you more,
returned your advances
with tenderness;
Perhaps on a summer night
with a round refulgent moon,
I know you would have loved that.
Our brief encounter
And that intimate time
we spent together,
the closeness of our bodies,
the whisperings,
the frenzy,
Soon to end.
We sat together in that waiting room
Your departure imminent.
The roar was deafening and final
As they sucked you from my ear,
Those peering doctors
and I saw you for the first time
An explosion of wing tissue and
olive oil in a glass pipette.
Your brown torso on the nozzle
like a battered rugby ball.
Lepidopterectomy!
I never knew your name;
Perhaps I'll have your babies.
winston plowes
Mon 1st Nov 2010 13:17
Unexpected end! Not sure if you needed the word lepidepterectomy? or indeed the very last line. This would give a better ending for me and leave the reader to work a bit harder, but thats ok (IMHO) Win x Liked.
P.S I have also learn't a new word. Thx