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My unselfish lover
Her smile she never charged for
Her illuminated eyes
Lit boulevards
And we tiptoed
On promenades
In the midst of summer
Hand in hand my unselfish lover
and just then I realised
I love my unselfish lover
She bakes me cakes
Ask's for only,
me in return
&
reminds a man,
of a mother
warm
Smothers me.
She-
Intent,
That I,
am me.
She is
No one else
An unselfish lover.
<Deleted User> (5646)
Sat 14th Jun 2008 05:59
Lovely, i'd like to think i could be as unselfish as the one described in your poem. Unfortunately, the ugly green monster,(jealousy) is a trait i'm not proud of. Still,
Hi Pete, very romantic for you! Like Mel said though enchanting, not ranting! cheers Jeff
Pete Crompton
Fri 13th Jun 2008 09:57
Thanks. This was special to write.
darren thomas
Thu 12th Jun 2008 09:59
Lots 'going on' i feel, in just a few simple lines. The true beauty of poetry.
Do you have a garage where you keep these poems Pete? A lock-up, maybe?
I actually prefer this more gentle sounding PC than the one that i read and sense the ranting. I absorb more this way. Beltin' (as they say in Wigan).
<Deleted User> (5984)
Thu 12th Jun 2008 09:38
Oh Pete. this is such a beautiful poem. I love the easy style, the repetition of first and last line, the internal rhythm and rhyme. Enchanting Pete, enchanting.
Mel
x
Nice one Pete!
Pete Crompton
Thu 12th Jun 2008 00:45
thanks Rod
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Francine
Sun 24th May 2009 23:21
This is so beautiful!
There is nothing more exhilarating than having someone
accept you for who you truly are...
and feeling free enough to be completely yourself : )