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Frieze

Through owning dogs we get to know the woods:

though not the woods our senses might distinguish

had the fear of dog not struck the neighbourhood,

those beasts that cannot mind their own business,

 

who scrum like Englishmen in a foreign ground

emptying stomachs and bowels in gutters,

who strut like gunslingers  through the Western town,

the good citizens pulling down the shutters.

 

So do the creatures of the earth and trees

cease to gather and chatter and become

a still life picture, a forest frieze,

as if nature, by its nature, were dumb.

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Chris Dawson

Wed 10th Nov 2010 08:37

Like this very much. Am not a dog lover in the least, in fact I'm quite frightened of them as they definitely don't like me, but I've never understood why anyone would have a dog and then just let it out to roam the streets.
Anyway - interesting poem.
Cx

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winston plowes

Tue 2nd Nov 2010 20:36

two bits really stood out for me Ray... 'if nature, by its nature, were dumb' is lovely and the comparisons of dogs to (Mad) Englishmen abroad defiling the streets was great stuff. Win.

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Ray Miller

Tue 2nd Nov 2010 08:51

Steve. Maybe the problem with the rhythm is that the first line isn't my own. It comes from Freda Davis on Discussions forum, who offered it up for anyone to use. Summat like that.

Isobel."never easy to understand"- you sound just like my therapist. I'm really very simple - my wife will testify to that. I saw a TV programme a few years ago in which a woman, whose dog had died, described how different the woods were when she walked them alone. Freda's line reminded me of that so I continued with a poem probably in an opposite vein to Freda's original intent.It's always nice to read of diverse interpretations but it bears repeating - I am very simple.

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Isobel

Tue 2nd Nov 2010 06:49

Yours are never easy to understand Ray.
If I had to stick an interpretation on it (which I have to do in order to enjoy my poetry) I would say that you are talking about social interraction.
So many of us not knowing how to conduct ourselves, leads to reservation, holding back. 'as if nature, by its nature, were dumb'.

Still life is of little benefit to humanity - pretty to look at but lifeless.

I like the ideas in it - if I am anywhere warm - also like the anology of dogs not being able to keep their own business - that's another soap box of mine - can't believe what I have to step around in my locality. If I let my kids shit on the pavements, there would be uproar.

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