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ONE MORE FROST

In this final winter,

Home to a vacant house

In mourning style,

With ice on the sale sign.

Unlit, but heated

By neighbourly care.

Still it is voiceless.

 

A card for Christmas,

Fallen on the floor,

Postmark from Pennsville:

A cousin, not too close,

Who has yet to hear

The march of long men

Sounding through the night.

 

Our neighbours we know.

And the fields are familiar.

But I name my navigators

Among the departed.

The distance taken

-Measureless in miles-

Is nothing against the dust.

◄ WHAT GUIDES THE SPIDER

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Greg Freeman

Thu 18th Nov 2010 13:41

You don't mention snow, but I feel it in the fields. There is warmth here amid the sorrow. The title makes me think of Robert Frost

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 18th Nov 2010 07:12

Beautiful poem.

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Elaine Booth

Wed 17th Nov 2010 23:49

I think perhaps "still" at the start of the final line of verse 1, when read out, gives emphasis to the sense of stillness. It is a deeply sad poem but so very, well, yes, as Cynthia says, haunting. I also like the line "the march of long men".

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Andy N

Wed 17th Nov 2010 13:46

really enjoyed this geoffrey... ideal this time for me...

one little thing which i maybe wrong is on the last line of the first stanza 'Still it is voiceless', you may want to reconsider 'it is still voiceless' but it is stirring stuff either way..

top one..

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 17th Nov 2010 10:51

Very haunting mood, developed with much finesse, using vivid details like 'unlit, but heated' 'voiceless'. The warmth of 'neighbourly care' and 'fields are familiar' is a tugging contrast with the cold reality of the present. 'I name my navigators among the departed' is a stirring line.

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