Untitled.
He held me by the heart,
Accents and miles apart
We were and still are
Lovely to meet you,
I know that much.
He had me at 'hello'.
He had me at 'goodbye'.
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Comments
I like this a lot, Georgina... I know what you mean.
'You had me at hello' is from the film 'Jerry Maguire'...
As a title, perhaps 'Lovely to meet you'
<Deleted User> (6517)
Sun 12th Dec 2010 21:37
i don't really know that film, might watch it. the last two lines are important to me to be honest...thank you i'm stuck on a title xx
<Deleted User> (7212)
Sun 12th Dec 2010 20:31
Lovely - don't you think it really deserves a title though? all the best. B
the ending seems sleepless in Seattle or some such film
i do like the disjointed narrative between second and third lines
i think this has potential; but i would move forward with only the first 3 maybe 4 lines
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Andy N
Mon 13th Dec 2010 08:07
bit of a change in style for you, Georgine in the terms of structure and i think it suits you actually.. would defo like to see experiment writing more in this way... nice one xxx