Plump blond girl
Sits next to me
Cute as a muffin top.
Takes out her lunch
And begins to munch
A roll, a cake, a bag of crisps.
Plugs her earphones in.
Gets her laptop on.
Gavin and Stacey.
Plump blond girl starts to laugh.
The seat next to me bounces up and down
Animated by her joy.
I sit glum
I never could laugh out loud.
Not even before my skin
Got so very thin.
ooops - thanks Cynthia, didn't see that typo! x
Another evocative timely observation that catches your readers by the heartstrings. Did you mean 'plump blonde girl starts to laugh' ie no 's' for a plural? Liked your point about not laughing out loud at canned comedy; your mind is probably scads ahead of the script.
<Deleted User> (8672)
Wed 15th Dec 2010 14:40
"I'm just being a boring old miseryguts fart of late!" I'm like it all the time.
<Deleted User> (7212)
Wed 15th Dec 2010 13:08
well, it's nice that you can still take pleasure in someone else's happiness.
I end up laughing at the one-liners in the card shops - I can't help it ! everyone must think I'm a complete nutter :)
Ta chaps. Of course I laugh out loud, in real life as it were. But I simply can't laugh at comedy, on TV, radio, live etc.. I know I'm being egged on to laugh so I can't. Just plain cussed I guess! I might crack a smile! This is another train journey poem. I so envied her, cos of her sheer natural joy. While I sat gazing out of the train window she had brought her own jolly world into the carriage with her. I'm just being a boring old miseryguts fart of late! ;-)
<Deleted User> (7212)
Wed 15th Dec 2010 08:25
I also love "cute as a muffin top". so why cant you laugh out loud ? is it plain inhibition? or is this just the narrator talking?? you should hear us at work - all the belly laughs on all sorts of subjects - most of them not very "PC" xx
Philipos
Tue 14th Dec 2010 21:31
I liked especially 'cute as a muffin top' and the implications in stanza 2 - nicely done
<Deleted User> (8672)
Tue 14th Dec 2010 19:33
Blondes have more fun, they say. Perhaps plump blondes have twice the fun! I like it.
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alan barlow
Fri 17th Dec 2010 20:51
the last stanza is great and speaks volumes maybe its just because i can relate to it more but i like the quirkiness and the inferences you put out there. "like"