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Evanescent

The flickers were fanned

and burnt your eyes blind;

bubbles burst from sewn-up lips,

squeezed out sighs and promises.

Comic book captions

 

you said never happened:

only a dream, my hallucination

that wasn't symbolic

and I'm not a prophet.

 

Why did I taste the odour of vomit

and fail to stroke your hair?

 

Time swings swift on this rolling boat

and fingers falter on the present.

Memories coagulate, stick in my throat.

Bubbles and dreams, you laughed -

and you were evanescent.

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Ray Miller

Fri 21st Jan 2011 18:44

It's a gift, Steve.
Don't know where you get the "totally beautiful" from, Ann.But thanks anyway.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 21st Jan 2011 06:14

I like the line "Time swings on this rolling boat". And I LOVE words like evanescent. But I'm not sure how that word fits in here either. Unless someone was totally beautiful while they were popping their cloggs?

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Ray Miller

Thu 20th Jan 2011 14:24

Thanks, Steve.God knows what it's about. It was a crap old poem that I've turned into a crap new poem. There was a hospital and a torture chamber and a love affair in there at various times. There's one line I like
Memories coagulate, stick in my throat.
That's it.I agree about evanescent and its ilk.

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