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The It Of It.

Under mustard sun.

Slight skip of lightening.

Dead heat and honey thunder.

Lonely as a bone.

Sheet metal whispers

Overrated fables fabricating

Meaning keeping dreamers

Insane to themselves.

 

Thought provoked

Silent annihilation

Of reason.

Desolate dark skies and dreary days.

Faint and cosmopolitan

Depression of senses

Lacking any structure

Nurtured by nothing

But mood approval.

Truth proof concluding

Nobody survives.

Auto traumatical

Instant kiss of ticking

Tock tock clock

Sick as time.

Tenor lunged roaring

At last, finality.

Less bored

By the chorus

Of death.

◄ Sullen fallow hollow

Thinking In Image. ►

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melanie coady

Wed 9th Mar 2011 11:27

fucking love it bro xxx

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 21st Feb 2011 12:01

I really liked it all. Kealan, my jaw drops these days as I read your work. And so much! There will be revisions (maybe) later, but the strength is already inherent. Your mastery of vocabulary is outstanding. Sometimes it takes will power to reign in such a stock of words available to use. Do you ever sleep? I bet you saw the Birmingham performance of 'Othello' on telly. The last lines seem to be an echo of that emotional final scene. Or not. That you 'fucking love poetry' illuminates what you write.

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Andy N

Mon 21st Feb 2011 08:09

interesting point raised by steve there which i agree with there.. i agree the first stanza was probably the stronger for me also in particular the last two lines of it.

the problem i perhaps have with the second stanza is i am wondering whether it should be cut back somewhat or split into two as it seems too long for me (Would cripple me reading that out).

interesting read however... A

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garside

Sun 20th Feb 2011 19:38

Mr Black i agree with thee

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