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on waking

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On waking

 

after dreams of an Arabian souk

having no money for smoky dancers,

whose sand clad feet slap dusty alleys

I hold a microscopic lizard

he wriggles in my cupped hands

when he leaps away I see

he is skinny as a wire.

A childhood friend not seen in years appears.

There is a bus ride, the bus near missed,

the road skirts perilous cliff edges

looking steep down to a whale-thick sea

where waves rise mountainous.

 

Yes, on waking

after dreams of an Arabian souk

I rise, slip on my dressing gown

make coffee

thinking – where have I been?

 

 

 

dreams

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Laura Taylor

Tue 22nd Mar 2011 14:30

Ooo, I like how you put the dream in purple! Enjoyed this Anne - more dreams!

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Elaine Booth

Mon 21st Mar 2011 20:02

Loved the surreal feel - the clue's in the picture you posted with the poem! Perhaps it's the "On waking" and then in line 5 "I hold.." that might throw the reader - not quite sure if you really have woken or not.
I like how you end on a question. xxx

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Mon 21st Mar 2011 17:52

Ha - dont listen to grumpy old Graham (not unless you agree, that is ). I love it. And you are right about dreams anyway - say what you like, do what you like - it's your dream ! BTW - in my dreams it's always trains (missing, wrong one, etc).

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Anthony Emmerson

Mon 21st Mar 2011 10:19

Hi Ann,

I always admire those who dare write about their dreams. Yours seem very well defined and vivid. Do you have a hankering for the Harem?

Do you believe that dreams have meaning - or are they jusy our brains doing their "filing" while we sleep? Loved "whale thick sea."
The only dreams I ever seem to be able to remember are the recurring ones ; especially those where I have the ability to fly. I never want to wake up from those.

Regards,
A.E.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:29

Graham, I don't have lizards in my bedroom in Cornwall in March - or any other time. What are you like? :)

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Isobel

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:29

I'm only pulling your leg - I know you are a big sweetie really. I presumed you must be quite familiar with Ann, to speak so bluntly. It must make funny reading for newbies though! x

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:28

I just wrote this this morning as soon as I got up, describing my dream. I might have expected a bit of psychoanalysis but not character assasination Graham ;-) Give a gal a break!

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:26

Sorry Isobel. I hope Ann knows I'm a big fan and looking back I should have sounded less demanding, but I am always critical of Ann's speed to publish, perhaps because I'm a tortoise.

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Isobel

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:26

We all seem to have posted comments at the same time.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:24

Ann its the journey thing and the hankering for past things (schoolfriends etc) I'm sorry I thought you'd woken up to see the lizard. Perhaps the dream contents deserve a bit more considering. Aren't they supposed to be allegorical?

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Isobel

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:23

So that told you Ann! LOL And I'm wondering what Graham might do if you don't sort it...

Graham has a point about the microscopic - though I didn't give it thought until he did.

The poem has an absurd, surreal feel to it - the one you would get from dreams that don't mean anything, I suppose.

You have some odd line breaks going on in here also. I've got a bee in my bonnet about line breaks since Anthony's thread - I'm starting to really notice them. Perhaps you wanted a disjointed feel.
An interesting poem. I've never written about dreams before - I feel inspired...

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:19

Hmmm . . . you are right about the word microscopic regarding the way it sounds, but I would query the fact that you could not see it if it was in a dream. Surely you can do anything in a dream? You can fly, so surely you can see something that is microscopic. Similarly, why do people suddenly appear in dreams, when you haven't seen them in forty years? I don't know. The images of the sea were the strongest ones in my dream, you are right there. And I am always missing buses in my dreams. In fact buses are a reccurring theme! I have no idea why.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 20th Mar 2011 20:06

Microscopic is a nasty word in poetry and is not correct, as you wouldn't be able to see it.
I think you should re-write this and change it around to accentuate the whale thick sea and the mountainous waves, the drama of the perilous cliff edges and why did this friend suddenly appear. There is a lot of potential intrigue here. Sort it out.

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