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a slight spiritual tugging

theres a slight spiritual tugging
someone is calling from
the edge of isolation
thats fine he says to himself
as every man feels it
especially in the loaded rooms
and even in chambers,
where, we are supposed to rest drunk heads,
next to breathing forms in beds,
even there.
I suppose it's a sea of souls
the old waving not drowing situation
the old half full half empty,
life what you make it,
tomorrow starts today,
situation
a mellow song tempers the mood
a touch
but its other hand
gives too much to tears
and the grown man grows stems
to use as inserts
so no saline solution is ducted
instead muscles tenses
as he was instructed to hold it in
against instinct
the ghosts of the room have fingers
like in photographs famous and pointing
right through and beyond his form
and every faithfull narcissist
naturally thinks its him
but if invisible
finds, when turns around
the sea of lonely faces.
open are all the doors of carna
his hindsight gave him the power of Janus
and that just made it worse.


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Francine

Fri 22nd May 2009 21:36

I really like the spiritual quality of this...


J'ai tout compris sauf ces deux lignes:

'and the grown man grows stems
to use as inserts'

Pourrais-tu me les expliquer s'il te plaƮt...

Pete Crompton

Sun 13th Jul 2008 23:00

thanks love
you are spot on with the interpretation

x

<Deleted User> (5646)

Sun 13th Jul 2008 21:58

This is very spiritually deep Mr. C.
BUT I LIKE IT.
The male who hides emotion because of the false doctrinations associated with his upbringing probably. (That men should be men and not cry etc..)
Then moving on to wanting to believe that someone cares enough to notice and feels like the written words are just for him, then realizes. Creating jealousy in the ending. Or could it possibly be true love after all?

Great stuff and quite diverse i think, for you.
Love Janet.xx

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