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Attention Deficit

Last year a bus driver in Birmingham was filmed whilst driving his bus and reading a novel at the same time. The film was posted on You Tube and the driver was sacked. I was on the bus.Here's my story. 

 

There's a lot of shops in Selly Oak

and I'm writing down their names

....KwikSave....

 

to show the wife when I get home

that I'm trying hard to change

....New Look....

 

I'm on the number 61 bus

after visiting a therapist

....Barking Mad....

 

I'm on the 61 bus because

I have an attention deficit

....Focus....

 

I discovered it last Saturday -

well, my missus found it really

....Nightingale Jewellery....

 

when she came home unexpectedly

as I'm sat down watching telly

....Homebase....

 

I'd got Horse-Racing from Worcester

and James Brown on a CD

....Dr Fang's Music School....

 

football on the computer

and I'm reading Dostoyevsky

....Busy Bodies....

all simultaneously

 

She wore the dress that she'd just bought

and her hair was cut and dyed

....Posh Pets....

 

and when she asked me what I thought

I unthinkingly replied

....Dragon Fashions Tattoos....

 

that the Villa are still winning

James Brown's the King of Soul Music

....Topshop....

 

I've just lost in a photo-finish

and Raskolnikov has blew it

....Selly Sausage....

 

without bothering to look up

....The Gun Barrels....

 

 

She reckoned that I needed help

counselling or a therapist

....Let's Talk....

 

"You're in a world all by yourself,

you've got an Attention Deficit!"

....Farce and Firkin....

 

When I proclaimed my innocence

she exclaimed that's just a symptom

....Suizen's Noodle Bar....

 

of Oppositional Defiance

I watched the 3.15 from Kempton

....People's Dispensary for Sick Animals....

 

So I went to see the therapist

there were six of us in therapy

....Small World....

 

and told them about my deficit

but the wife got all their sympathy

....Mud Cafe....

 

A basic course of CBT

was the therapist's suggestion

....Alternatives Ltd....

 

how to focus on reality

and pay it full attention

....Acropolis Now....

 

Curbing selfish tendencies

would brighten the prognosis

....Colour Me Beautiful....

 

then the others aired their grievances

but I didn't take much notice

....Forget Me Nots....

 

And now I'm writing down these notes

while on the bus returning

....Kebab Land....

 

of all the shops in Selly Oak

I pass by on my journey

....Taj Mahal....

 

and as we're coming to my stop

I feel attentive and alert

....Ali Baba Lebanese Coffee....

 

but as I'm waiting to get off

my inner harmony's disturbed

....The Nail Bar....

 

The driver of Number 61

uses elbows for the steering

....Mamma Mia....

 

and his hands to turn the pages of

the novel that he's reading

....Omar Khayyam....

 

All the way to town and back

he's weaved his way by magic

....Persian Rug and Gift Centre....

 

reading On The Road by Kerouac

without glancing at the traffic

....Dotcomicide....

 

I wrote the name of the therapist

on the back of the driver's book

....Little Shop of Favours....

 

"You've got an Attention Deficit!

Take my seat in Therapy Group"

....Costcutter....

 

My need is somewhat less than yours.

How on earth do you drive a bus....?

....Juggling and Kite Shop....

 

He opened automatic doors

without bothering to look up

....Next....

 

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Ray Miller

Sat 11th Jun 2011 21:00

Thanks, Steve. I think it's a general problem here, that all poems, good and not so good, disappear rather too quickly.Attention Deficit is rife!

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Ray Miller

Thu 9th Jun 2011 12:15

Thanks all.I wish I could remember now why I thought of the shops idea - I wrote it about a year ago and have recently rearranged it, because I want to perform it with an accomplice sat on stage speaking the shop names. It would be great to think he was reading On The Road but no, I made that up.

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 8th Jun 2011 21:34

Really great!!!

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Chris Co

Wed 8th Jun 2011 19:48

I like this.

If you read the poem with and without the shop names you realise that the names you give us, gives us our own attention deficit by way of distraction. That is clever.

Also by reading the poem in these two ways, you get very different experiences, much like someone else on the bus without an attention deficit may have a very different feeling regarding the journey- is this intentional? I do hope so because it is clever to think it might be.

I also love the irony of the driver's choice of book. Now did you change this with artistic licence or is life just that strange?

If you did change the book title with artistic licence can that be seized by the police along with the drivers driving licence? LoL

Well written

Chris



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Isobel

Wed 8th Jun 2011 13:51

Very funny - and whan an unusual theme - you have taken me by surprise AND entertained me. I do like to be taken by surprise...

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Laura Taylor

Wed 8th Jun 2011 13:07

Haha! Nice one Ray - love this, very clever

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