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chocolate shoes

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I want to buy you chocolate shoes

with cherry buttons at the heel

a petticoat of sugarspun

like candifrost

and sparklers

 

I want to buy you chocolate shoes

with parma violets at the heel

and as the chocolate melts into

the tender crevice slip my tongue

to find the delicacy there

the cleavage inbetween your toes

 

I want to buy you chocolate shoes

with soles made out of candied fruits

to stick you to my floor so you

can never run away from me

entice you with an ice gem ring

and keep you sweet and keep you sweet

in petticoats and chocolate shoes

and dreams of toes and tongues and you

 

 

 

 

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Emma McCourty

Fri 10th Jun 2011 11:02

I Like it!its is very fluid and captivationg due to the same words beginning each stanza. Its suits the list style and keeps the intense focus on the 2 protagonists :o)

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 10th Jun 2011 08:33

Um, it's probably safer to avoid men AND cucmbers if you ask me!

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Thu 9th Jun 2011 21:11

for an old bint you ain't half got a dirty mind !

On that note, ....a friend of mine has been avoiding men for years - frightened that she might catch something.... then she goes & catches E.Coli off a cucumber !
(I hope your cucumbers are all safe Ann)

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Val Cook

Thu 9th Jun 2011 19:48

I love it Anne,very sexy.

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 9th Jun 2011 15:42

Thanks Ray - much better! :)

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Ray Miller

Thu 9th Jun 2011 12:07

This is lovely, Ann, especially the final verse, wonderful rhythm and language. That said, I wonder why the 2nd verse isn't more compact, like the last one.

I want to buy you chocolate shoes

with parma violets at the heel

and as the chocolate melts into

the tender crevice slip my tongue

to find the delicacy there

the cleavage inbetween your toes

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John Coopey

Wed 8th Jun 2011 23:16

Oooh... you Dirty Gerty!

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Isobel

Wed 8th Jun 2011 22:15

That's a lovely recording and performance. Your voice lends itself well to audio. What a shame you don't get more chance to perform your stuff - it really brings it to life. x

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 8th Jun 2011 21:10

Oh go on then!! :)

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Isobel

Wed 8th Jun 2011 20:31

Or you could go commando performance style and put on a gruff rough voice...

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Isobel

Wed 8th Jun 2011 20:30

Now you mention it... it's just I can hear your voice saying it. Can't you be gay for a day?

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 8th Jun 2011 20:21

I guess I didn't think of doing an audio cos it was supposed to be a man talking to a woman. I was putting myself in someone else's shoes!

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Isobel

Wed 8th Jun 2011 20:17

It's a shame this doesn't have audio Ann. I can imagine your honey voice reading this.

'and keep you sweet and keep you sweet
in petticoats and chocolate shoes
and dreams of toes and tongues and you'

I love the flow and the sweetness of it all!

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