Ticket to Ride (Blackpool Mystery)

by Andy N

Thursday 21st July 2011 10:01 pm

Random moments

bring portals of memories.

Random moments

bring fragments of peace.

On dust covered dunes

lost in the drones of the sea,

or looking at you

looking aimslessly out of the window.

Watching Candy Floss

dance across the sea.

Listening to bus wheels

stutter like stray thoughts.

Looking for seagulls

like clues to a great mystery.

Clues across the closed pier,

and the chaos of the severed sun

looking for a ticket to ride

as it chases the bus

past an aloof Arcade

before you find the answer

in my arms.

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Andy N

Sat 3rd Sep 2011 00:42

Hi Elaine; - it was wrote on a summers day which i guess sums up the british summertime but thanks for the comment again - hope you are good - speak soon xx

Elaine Booth

Wed 17th Aug 2011 00:07

Makes me think of the expectations we all have of holidays too and the fact that maybe they never quite can live up to that, esp Blackpool out of season. You don't mention the weather or time of year at all but with the closed pier I can't help but think of a blustery day with scattered showers in early autumn! Lovely ending. XX

Andy N

Mon 25th Jul 2011 23:12

thanks to all for the comments here. This has as you may have guessed one of my favourite poems to write so far.. A

Jon

Sun 24th Jul 2011 14:25

Nice one Andy,
Some great lines,'Listening to bus wheels stutter like stray thoughts'.Says a lot without the need for too many words.

Isobel

Sat 23rd Jul 2011 10:42

One of your best, I would say Andy.

'Random moments
bring portals of memories

on dust covered dunes
lost in the drones of the sea'

I particularly liked these two verses - the alliteration and the flow... x

Francine

Sat 23rd Jul 2011 02:20

I love this too, Andy.
It reminds me of how you feel when visiting a place for the first time...
all the wonder.

I never got to visit Blackpool... on my to do list : )

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Fri 22nd Jul 2011 20:48

Love this one Andy. Lovely little poem with a lovely lovely ending.

Laura Taylor

Fri 22nd Jul 2011 09:30

Ooo I like this Andy, some cracking lines in it.

Little typo - there's a surplus 's' in aimlessly

This is an interesting line: 'and the chaos of the severed sun'. It sounds GREAT, and I think it refers to the setting sun being chopped up by the silhouette of the pier, and the way it fractures the light into your eyes so you have trouble seeing properly. That's what it feels like to me anyway.

Love it

Jeff Dawson

Thu 21st Jul 2011 21:37

Really like this mate, conjures up fond images of a seaside holiday, love the analogy with the Beatles song and nice ended, nice one! Jeff

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