Arab spring

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Seditious seeds-

that

waiting seethes,

await awhile

for ripen time,

grow greener

and reach further up

than ill-timed bloom;

plow back injustice-

feed the fields-

a greater harvest 

than a snatched 

fruition ever yields.

 

Words and foto T.Carroll

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Ray Miller

Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:31

Nice poem. I'd prefer "ripening time". I found the last 3 lines less than smooth, maybe you could lose "ever" from the last line.

<Deleted User> (6315)

Fri 30th Sep 2011 15:01


Corr..yes impressed..just rolls off the tongue..nice work indeedy.. :)

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Laura Taylor

Thu 29th Sep 2011 11:22

Impressive Tommy. Love the structure, the choppiness of the language, and the overall 'message'

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