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Play Planet

It’s dark where you are. We’ve just travelled five tunnels,

the best I can manage, poor simulation.

We waved to each other in the window:

see you better, she laughed, then the light comes fast;

bridges are only little darks,

barely time to hear your heart flutter.

 

The one at Play Planet is circular yellow,

as bright as e-numbers and leads to the zigzag,

a thing like a mangle and manholes

the adults all struggle to squeeze through.  

If You’re Gonna Travel Far played

an hour and a quarter, there ought to be

some kind of law. She pissed two pair of pants

and a table bounced on her bonce just before Great Malvern.

 

She howled and cried and stamped her feet;

I practised my distraction technique -

thought of all the dead men

and the dead time they spent

inserting dark into the Malvern Hills

and all of this earth you’re sleeping down under.

 

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Ray Miller

Mon 7th Nov 2011 20:46

Thanks all. My wife has gone to Austalia for 2 weeks and I'm left in charge of 6 girls.I miss her terribly, the tunnels were a kind of brief connection with the dark down under. Pathetic, I know. You may well be right about the 2nd line, Andy, but it's one of several I think that could do with renovation.

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Isobel

Mon 7th Nov 2011 19:52

I somehow find this hard to follow. I'm guessing it's about an adult in some kind of a play zone and then a journey home with a tired cantankerous child. I certainly know how that feels...

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 5th Nov 2011 09:25

I like it too. I love the
"bridges are only little darks"
line, and the ending particularly. And the way the two threads tie together. Sounds like the writer is more "with" the long gone tunnel builders than the child (?) he is accompanying. Made me think of times when you are with your children being all jolly when you have some big "grown up" problem taking over your mind. Been there!

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Andy N

Sat 5th Nov 2011 08:51

i really enjoyed this, ray.. perhaps it's me but the second line seemed to jar.. perhaps it would would work better minus it? either way, good piece m8 - cheers - andy

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