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BELIEVING THAT I LIED

I know that it always hurts

When I think of you,

And I know it always will

Every time I do.

 

The memory of what we had

Just won't go away,

And knowing that it turned out bad

Darkens each new day.

 

| know when we said goodbye

Something in me died;

You seemed to be so very sure

When you said I lied.

 

It wasn't just the words you used

To tell me we were through;

It hurt much worse that you believed

That I could cheat on you.

 

When I said I didn't care,

It tore me up inside;

It's funny in the saddest way,

But that was when I lied.

love   cheat. lie

â—„ TWO SIDES OF A COIN

MAN MUST CARE â–º

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 17th Nov 2011 00:47

Ladies - thanks for your feedback. I value the
feminine perspective is such things...we men
can be a bit reticent about emotional things.
J.C. - thanks for the tip about R.M.'s work. I'll check it out. Alas, any thought of having a "bloody big cog" would merely render me guilty of wishful thinking!
Salutations.

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Isobel

Wed 16th Nov 2011 20:56

The best part of the poem is the last verse. Until then I wasn't really hooked in. That last verse really kicks you in the stomach and leaves you hurting. Putting a brave front on is perhaps something I can more identify with. I love the baldness of it.

<Deleted User> (9801)

Wed 16th Nov 2011 20:31

laura's comment says it all!Raw.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 16th Nov 2011 16:34

Ooo raw

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John Coopey

Wed 16th Nov 2011 15:54

Check out Richie Muster's blogs - I think you'll like them

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John Coopey

Wed 16th Nov 2011 15:45

Even more power out of little lines! Economy of effort is superb. (You must have a bloody big cog in that brain of yours).

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