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Down by the sea...

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I lost my care-full

soul...

where?

there,

down by the sea...

 

She cast a smiling

glance...

where?

there,

looking back at me...

 

I'm sure

I left my soul...

where?

there,

down by the sea...

 

I stooped to pick

it up...

where?

there,

down by the sea...

 

I watched as

she walked away...

where?

there,

into the waiting sea...

 

I let it slip like

sand...

where?

between care-less

thoughts and fingers,

into a waiting sea...

 

Words and foto by T Carroll

 

◄ My loose checked tie

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Laura Taylor

Mon 28th Nov 2011 10:47

I like this Tommy - agree with the others on the use of repetition. Black ending there with her going into the sea - good, that.

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Sun 27th Nov 2011 15:30

I like the split of care-full, and care-less changing the meaning .. sad one..

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 27th Nov 2011 12:37

I liked the repetition - like a lyric. And the
way it conjured up a fleeting moment of opportunity lost - in my mind, anyway.

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