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It's Closing Time in the Gardens of the West

The saxophones have stolen from the silver tin

and run riot on her pliant little body.

A forefinger and thumb have stretched young skin;

she grows wet in the depths of her study

where she’s learning  lap dancing and to TEFL,  

to throw a dart in a far part of the globe,

follow the arrow for the precious metal

while her legs and her lips remain in vogue.

 

It’s closing time in the gardens of the west;

the baton is passed on to feed a hunger.

She’s in a tipsy state and a flimsy dress,

bent over at the wrong end of a conga.

While foreign eyes are leering at his daughter

he’s being treated for Adjustment Disorder.

◄ The Sound - Air

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Ray Miller

Mon 5th Dec 2011 13:25

Thanks, Steve. It's not so much that WOL's bar needs raising, but there needs to be fewer players on the pitch. Nothing ever gets its proper dues.

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Ray Miller

Fri 2nd Dec 2011 18:51

Well, when I say silver tin I mean a money box or, in broader terms, the nation's wealth. When I say saxophones I mean bad men with more money than sensitivity. It's a doddle, this poetry lark.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 2nd Dec 2011 17:28

I'm still very interested in the tin reference. And I've not changed my name - now it's my real name!

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Ray Miller

Fri 2nd Dec 2011 11:53

Well, I did give a line by line explanation on another site, but I'll be brief. I worry what the future holds for my numerous daughters under the Next World Order when we all become much poorer. Will Western women become, say, the new Eastern Europeans?
Ann, you've seen my face! And changed your name in consequence? Actually, I was trying to put a proper photo of myself on the profile picture yesterday but I can't work out how it's done. I'll have to get one of my daughters to do it - again.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 2nd Dec 2011 07:00

Hmmm . . . silver tin, the west - can't help thinking of Cornwall. I don't understand your poem but I do think parts of it are beautiful, esp the second verse. (Nice to see your face at last!)

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Thu 1st Dec 2011 22:24


What prompted this one Ray?..I like this :o)

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Laura Taylor

Thu 1st Dec 2011 16:45

Interesting piece Ray - I'm loving some of the sonics in here. Needs another reading or 3 for me I reckon. Some amazing delicacy in here

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