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Coat

 

Meadow threaded, seen apart from commute and promenade;

to hold it still, I will –

etch with saffron, the whole of the sun

and fill my pockets warm, with her.

 

The cotton drop,

where the spider foots

and the wind, knotted with timber tuts -

I shall loop with my button holes and hold them close,

 

and then when the time is right,

and fastened up,

draw the hood over my head

and stand under the moon and stars.

 

 

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Steve Higgins

Mon 5th Mar 2012 19:20

A lovely poem that easily conjures up images in the mind and there's a great lyrical feel to it too.

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Andy N

Sun 4th Mar 2012 18:27

excellent pace throughout poem Marianne.. not a word over-used - very skilled writing indeed x

<Deleted User> (6292)

Sun 4th Mar 2012 13:12

Hello Marianne

Superb!
woderfully crafted one gentle floated image after another... your poem was just perfect.

Augusta xx

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Laura Taylor

Fri 2nd Mar 2012 10:54

This is a lovely piece of writing...made me feel warm to read it. Etch with saffron...mmMMM

Great poem

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Lynn Dye

Thu 1st Mar 2012 21:56

Lovely poem, Marianne, some great lines, enjoyed.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 1st Mar 2012 16:16

Thank you folks

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Mike Hilton

Thu 1st Mar 2012 14:29

Excellent, wonderful lines!

'The cotton drop,
where the spider foots
and the wind, knotted with timber tuts-'...

Im jealous of your talent!

regards

Mike

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kealan coady

Thu 1st Mar 2012 12:19

this is really good, understated with elegant phrases throughout, great poem again.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Thu 1st Mar 2012 12:09

WOW! is an easy word to apply
to your work but the one that for us
sums it up.

Teensy suggestion to the last line-

'and stand under
but never seeing the Moon and stars
through tears?

Shall we get our coats?xx

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