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Under the moonlight in the park

The stars shined like sparks.

A young couple walked,

You could hear them talk.

He was a guy with a sportsman's figure,

She was like a thin fragile stalk.

All the time the guy talked.

For a bet he crossed the bay

And it was on a stormy day.

He fought with the devils stream,

He heard the petrels scream.

How brave you are- she said,

If it were me I would be dead

For any money I wouldn’t cross that bay

I am a terrible coward – she wanted to say.

But he interrupted her, kissed and said:

You are my dearest sparrow-coward.

The stars were shining like silver nails

Ready to tell them fairy tales.

But all of a sudden as from the ground

Two strange figures of men appeared

No one else was around and…

The young man felt as if he was bound.

One eared stranger slowly neared.

You, chicks! Money , earrings, watches…Quick!

And the other one showed a knife saying:

Money or your young life?

The lad quickly took off his watch

And felt something wet in his crotch.

But it was not the same with the lass

She was outraged by this sass.

She stepped ahead and loudly said:

Damn fascist you are!

You are an enemy without breast,

You are looking for an arrest.

I don’t care about your knife

You dirty scoundrel! I will strive for life!

If I die you’ll be sentenced to death

If I stay alive you won’t go too far,

You’ll be found even in a jar.

She looked straight into his eyes

And the man felt that she didn’t say lies.

He was embarrassed and said to the second one:

To hell with them! It looks as if she is a bomb.

Two  figures disappeared round the corner,

Both of them looking like mourners.

 

Under the moonlight in the park

The stars now were dark.

A young couple walked,

You couldn’t hear them talk.

He was a guy with a sportsman's  figure,

She was like a thin fragile stalk.

 

©Larisa Rzhepishevska (Odessa, Ukraine)

The 8th of March, 2012

 

 

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sat 10th Mar 2012 16:35

Thank you, Harry for your advice. I've made changes but removed the last line "She was a coward girl" as this "coward" was already used. The first 6 lines and the last 6 lines are a bit different. At the beginning "the stars shined like sparks", the end - "the stars now were dark", the beginning - "you could hear them talk", the end -"you couldn't hear them talk"

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 10th Mar 2012 15:18


Larisa nice little story.

I would remove the first two lines and both begin and end it with the last six lines...(sort of encapsulate it)

It`s good as it is though.

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Lynn Dye

Thu 8th Mar 2012 23:36

I enjoyed this, Larisa, very entertaining. x

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 8th Mar 2012 22:05

This is another great piece of story telling Larisa, with a good twist to keep the readers entertained. :) Best wishes, Dave

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 8th Mar 2012 16:24

ok Let it be sparrow-coward. Thank you very much for your help.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 8th Mar 2012 16:22

Larisa - there are two English words:
1.coward and 2.cower.
1.means a person easily frightened by pain or danger/risk or the fear of either.
2. is the act of dropping to the knees or to shrink back - in fear or fearful obedience.
Hope this helps your excellent forays in poetry
in English.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 8th Mar 2012 15:50

It's my new word. lol

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Marnanel Thurman

Thu 8th Mar 2012 15:28

What is a sparrow-dread?

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