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Altcar Army Rifle Ranges

Wind carries far-off rapid rifle fire rippling roar,

assaulting ears, disturbing calm.

Dissonant intrusion in this happy haven,

this lovely, lonely garden.

I rest the spade against the fence

and wonder

whether to take offence.

Do they hate their targets?

What do the bullets mean?

Do they enjoy what they do?

Does it make them happy?

Does it make them violent of mind?

Do they feel they are doing me good?

Do they care?

I shake my head and reach for the undaunted spade,

which will do no permanent damage.

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Andy N

Sat 17th Mar 2012 10:15

lot i like in this, Dave but do love the first four lines in particular.. top stuff, man

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Thu 15th Mar 2012 12:26

Drivers of motor vehicles kill more than the number of dead targets on a rifle range. Earplugs might be a nice birthday present for you perhaps! But seriously, your 'spade with broad nib' is a mightier illustration of an alliterative logevity than when the mayfly of bullets has targetted silence. So there!
Ta muchly, Nick.

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Nick Coleman

Mon 12th Mar 2012 17:40

Good. Like the idea of the spade doing no permanent damage.
One thing, not too sure if 'fence' and 'offence' works?? perhaps too distracting.

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