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TOWARD SLEEP

 

 

Eyes closed

…So soon?

How quietly you breathe,

How slight

The gentle rising of your breast.

Swiftly indeed

The insistent urging of desire

Has succumbed

And,

Docile now,

Rocks

In her peaceful bay.

 

Outside

The trees

Are absolutely still.

And motionless

Wide continents of cloud

Have hidden the moon.

Somewhere

The murmur

Of a pebbly stream

Croons

Continuously

While from afar,

Muffled

Along a lonely motorway,

The sound

of a passing traveller

Purrs,

Then fades.

 

At first

The very shadows

Seem attentive

And alert.

But soon

Even they,

Lulled

by your quiet breathing,

Grow drowsy

And drop off

And fall away

And only I

Lying here beside you

Am awake.

 

Peering

Through the darkness

At your face

I try to guess

What quiet graciousness

Of dream

Moves

With such calm decorum

Through your sleep.

...........................

But then

.......................

I too

..................

Become slumberous

.............

And lie back

..........

And fall to

....

 

But just before I went to sleep I swear

That the tall, gaunt, Guardian of the dark

Drew back the clouds, blew out the moon and stars

And, looking down, smiled on us for a moment

…………………………..…Then crept away

◄ KALMAR SUMMER SONG

ANY POET`S ANSWER TO THE ASTROPHISICISTS ►

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Robert Mann

Mon 30th Apr 2012 18:17

Good that you should write about your sleeping beauty, rather than them wake up and find you staring at them! I found this one both rich in content and expressive in imagery.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 25th Mar 2012 20:29


Thanks folks, much appreciated.

For M.C./
Yes you`re right about the repeated `even - changed it (it`s a habit)...Also changed `dies` to fades -it`s better...Not entirely happy with that penultimate bit, particularly the dots at the end - I might change it sometime.

Thanks again all.

<Deleted User> (10185)

Sat 24th Mar 2012 14:25

Loved this, its so vivide

<Deleted User> (10123)

Sat 24th Mar 2012 09:11

Wow! Mucho like-oh Had to read it twice and loved every morsal. If you keep this up you'll get barred (bard) for being too good! Many thanks, a truly great piece. Ta muchly, Nick.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 23rd Mar 2012 21:48

What delightful imagery...a hymn to contented
slumber that pleases immensely by its use of
language.
In my mind though I read "The very shadows..."
preferring the one inclusion of the word "even"
where it follows as written - "...even they".
But that, I have to admit, is a personal POV.
I love the idea of the "...Guardian of the dark
(drawing) back the clouds..." and the rest. A
fantastic fantasy finale!!

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