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Wigwam

The miniatures we reproduced from saliva,

blood and juice once served to hold us as a glue,

called a truce on warring troops and propped us up

until the group had borne enough; the bairns

were insubordinate or simply grown too tall for us –

their skins sloughed while ours merely sag and drop.

Now those we foster and adopt, the cuckoo crop,

are practising the precipice, the clock ticks off

our wedding list. It’s this readiness to share

the nest that makes you so extraordinary -

and yes, of course, I’m up again for forgery

◄ Jubilee

I turned right at the end ►

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Ray Miller

Sun 3rd Jun 2012 10:01

Thanks Isobel.No, "you" is correct. She is extraordinary, I'm just a stupid twat who got lucky.

Thanks Steve. Yeah, but is there a better word than forgery that rhymes with extraordinary?
I saw the 2nd half of the JCC programme. I think I'll try and watch the whole thing on iplayer. I enjoy his stuff better when he slows down a bit - the way he performs Beasley Street these days is a travesty.

Thanks Harry. Bairns as peacemakers - yes, it does sound unlikely. I mean in the sense that couples are less likely to part if there are children to consider."Forgery" is ambivalent, I suppose, but there's a nod at "reproduced" in the first line.

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 2nd Jun 2012 14:59

Ray,
My fault (with this one) for being slow to `get` it - the clues are all there and they all appertain to the subject - it`s got a nice `whole` feel to it.

I`m fascinated by line three ( bairns as peacemakers?) Your `extraordinary` - for me -hints at thanks and admiration and the `forgery` (given the `we foster`) as a joke.

It`s all a case of aptly off-kilter words saying things in a thought provoking way, as Aristotle said (all right he was Greek)

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Isobel

Sat 2nd Jun 2012 09:16

I'd be tempted to change the 'you' to 'us' in the penultimate line.

Children are a kind of cement. I imagine it must be hard when they've all flown to still find that momentum - most of us don't get that far :) I like the subtle undertones in this.

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