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New poem, let me know your thoughts. It's called "Venus in Transit".

 

Venus in Transit (2012)

 

Venus yellow darkens in fierce caress with the Sun,

their celestial sex signals that another cycle’s done.

But what offspring shall fall to our planet?

What offerings of sacrifice in return for this etheric gift?

Perhaps a shift in consciousness will ensue,

a rebirth to enlighten the hearts of human kind.

 

So ride the tempest,

sacrifice life, love and death,

caress the one you love,

as venus does the sun,

because all this is temporary,

all awaiting the ultimate sacrifice:

 

destruction of tradition,

death to old precepts and concepts,

ways of life coming to an end,

all reflected in the shared orgasm

between Venus and the Sun,

lots of little deaths

to spawn the new beginning

here on Earth.

◄ Universe

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Paul Pyke

Tue 10th Jul 2012 23:18

Thanks for the feedback Mike.

The "little deaths" thing is a play on words and a metaphor stolen from the French for orgasm, which is "La petite Mort"

Thanks for reading.

Paul.

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Noetic-fret!

Sat 9th Jun 2012 13:23

Hello Paul, I once wrote something similar about sex between the celestial bodies. It is actually more difficult to write about than at first thought, so I am admiring you for your courage.

It is an interesting piece you have written, one that could be elaborated on. Not sure about the last stanza though with reference to lots of little deaths to spawn the new.

You obviously have the scope to write about many things.

Nice one

Mike

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