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Life's Towpath

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We walked the canal towpath in a gentle summer haze,
watching a lock leak water that seemed to go on for days,
our collie was running ahead and kept turning to watch us dawdle,
but we were in no hurry then as time seemed to present no hurdle...
 
It was the mid eighties and we were just two lovers, with one dog,
marriage was fine as we were, holding hands with no reason to jog.
but time is sneaky and goes fast, no matter how slow we walk,
and ten years and 3 children later, we had serious reasons to talk...
 
But back on the towpath it's peaceful, idyllic many might say,
so I keep a picture of the leaking lock gate which we saw that day,
the gush of water hinted at time's passage, which then we didn't know,
would rob us of time to spend together, no retirement in our afterglow...
 
Yes still I cherish those memories, diamond days we felt sure would last,
and though I only have pictures, in my mind's eye nothing has passed,
perhaps I can find a canal boat, and live out my days there alone,
for our collie died some years later & my love's heart went with a groan...
 
The birds are filling the soundscape, with a backdrop of water's gush,
the over head trees break the sunlight into dapples shaped by wind rush,
and the gravel we crunch under our feet, adds percussion to the song,
if ever I get that canal boat, I'll live out my days there, however long...
 
©Rhumour
July 23rd, 2012

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tony sheridan

Mon 1st Oct 2012 16:05

I like this poem a lot. Take care, Tony.

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 16th Aug 2012 09:51

Thanks Lynn, glad you like it :) Best wishes, Dave

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Lynn Dye

Wed 15th Aug 2012 22:07

Very enjoyable, Dave, some great lines.

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 01:03

Hi Winston - yes I certainly did need a prod, I have had few moments of inspiration recently, so thanks again for stirring me into action. :) Best wishes, Dave.

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 00:57

Thanks you very much Pat & Stef, you are as ever very kind to me. :) Best wishes, Dave

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winston plowes

Wed 1st Aug 2012 22:54

Glad I proded :-)

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Wed 1st Aug 2012 21:58

Your best so far Dave-clever lad.xx

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Wed 25th Jul 2012 16:54

Thanks Hugh, you are very kind, glad you enjoyed it. Best wishes, Dave

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Hugh

Wed 25th Jul 2012 08:14

A fabulous flow of choice words and expressions all through this blueprint.It possess the quality which allows us to enjoy reading it time and time again.
"diamond days,"----"the gravel we crunch under our feet,adds percussion to our song,"

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Tue 24th Jul 2012 15:31

Hello Isobel, yes there is something magical about water that brings out some thoughts and feelings - and perhaps helps with their flow too!

I wish you luck in finding your way to finishing the canal poem, I owe my effort to Winston for prodding me about his project, or it would not have been written.

All best wishes, Dave

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Tue 24th Jul 2012 15:25

Hi Greg - many thanks for your kind comments, great to have your feedback. :) Best wishes, Dave

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Greg Freeman

Tue 24th Jul 2012 10:33

I enjoyed this, Dave, thought it was tender and poignant. It grows on you with every re-read. A must for somewhere on the Rochdale canal trail, in my opinion. Well done.

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Isobel

Tue 24th Jul 2012 07:55

This is a sad one Dave. I think any scene with water in it does make you reflective on life and its pathways. I feel like that looking at sea lines also. I'm 2/3 of the way through my canal poem - not sure I'll post it though - can't seem to get any flow with my poetry at the moment.

I can't speak for Winston but I'm assuming that they just want canal poems - and this fits the bill :)

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