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Someone Else's Sorrow

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I picture you in someone else’s room -

In bed - a stranger’s ceiling overhead,

Awake in the gloom; feeling unfulfilled,

Cheerless and chilled by secrets left unsaid.

 

You’re wearing your usual man costume –

A routine face; average arms for regular embrace:

The suit you assume (crustacean casing)

For slapdash debasing and slipshod disgrace.

 

Whilst I, sitting at a damp train station,

Feel hollow, entombed within someone else’s sorrow.

Pale sensation: a girl cups a limp pet,

And, brimming with regret, holds it tight till tomorrow.

The Cupboard of Death ►

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Steve Higgins

Fri 4th Jan 2013 07:14

I know you wrote this a while ago but came across it while browsing. Excellent -especially the first verse. Best wishes, Steve

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Isobel

Wed 29th Aug 2012 22:58

Yes I like this one too. I particularly liked the last verse - the imprint of that final image/personification to convey sorrow and regret - very subtle.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 26th Aug 2012 13:50

sorry it had to be
us two uneducated,uneducable old duffers Chazzer-
but no probs,we'll be dead soon-haha!

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Charlie Preston

Sun 26th Aug 2012 13:29

Thank you! So pleased that someone likes it.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 26th Aug 2012 13:12

Love every single line Charlie
from first capital
to the last full stop

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