I'm Losing the Light

by Gus Jonsson

Sunday 9th December 2012 12:59 pm (first posted Saturday 8th December 2012 2:56 pm)

Anger raged

Leaving me ragged and broken high upon another lonely shore

Madness afire

Cruel words conspire from my open mouth

Blazing crazed vile obscenities

Washed away in a rain of tears I extinguished love

True true love

I gave up the fight

It’s growing darker now

I’m afraid I’m losing the light

Vomiting self-loathing into this ever night of despair

I’m losing the light

Where then in this cold edge of eternity lies the road to Hell?

The light has gone

Comments

Jon

Thu 8th Dec 2016 11:44

Hi Gus
Powerful slab of dark, unrelenting energy. Amazing stuff !

Gus Jonsson

Sun 9th Dec 2012 13:12

My Pc and I had an argument about that... it corrected the 'lies' to 'lays'... is it american or some such....??? anyway thanx for the typo nonetheless...and yes I am in My fathers Belt mode at the mo... Thankyou for your valued comments as usual...

...havn't seen ya since the sweary lady fainted
at Middleton

I hope you are well.

Gus
Stay in touch.

Julian (Admin)

Sun 9th Dec 2012 12:54

You are wearing your father's belt again, methinks Gus. powerful stuff. The word 'lays' does not lie easy here: 'lies' better, more grammatical? Unless it is a reference to some sordid act?

Gus Jonsson

Sun 9th Dec 2012 10:26

Thank you Isobel and Francine for your advice .... and valued comments

I will ensure that I 'Cheer Up', my previous poem, 'You Never Can Tell' a few days earlier had made poor Melanie Rees cry. So I must make amends although, 'Goin Down', well or otherwise, in Wigan's Bear Pit wasn't really what I had in mind.

love the bits an pieces of you both xx

Gus xx

Francine

Sat 8th Dec 2012 21:50

Isobel is right, you know... so go along and have some cheer :-D

Best parts:

'Washed away in a rain of tears I extinguished love
True true love
I gave up the fight
It’s growing darker now
I’m afraid I’m losing the light'

'Where then in this cold edge of eternity lays the road to Hell?
The light has gone'

xx

Isobel

Sat 8th Dec 2012 18:27

Well you may be losing the light Gus, but you're not losing your poetic touch. There's plenty to admire in this and I particularly like the end and the sad irony therein.

This is far too gloomy for Christmas though! Come along to the Tudor on Thursday and I'm sure we'll cheer you up - there's bound to be someone worse than you at any rate - which is always a strange comfort ;)

"Blazing crazed vile obscenities" - you aren't the secret compere by any chance???

xx

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I'm Losing the Light

Anger raged

Leaving me ragged and broken high upon another lonely shore

Madness afire

Cruel words conspire from my open mouth

Blazing crazed vile obscenities

Washed away in a rain of tears I extinguished love

True true love

I gave up the fight

It’s growing darker now

I’m afraid I’m losing the light

Vomiting self-loathing into this ever night of despair

I’m losing the light

I’m losing the light

Where then in this cold edge of eternity lies the road to Hell?

The light has gone

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