Caught Between The Devil And A Dragon
I think this is a good example of the impact free verse can have when done well - and we don't find too much of that. You have a great sense of rhythm and cadence in this piece which gives it the right flow to draw the reader /listener on.
I love caring for my granddaughter 1 day a week by choice- but it leaves me exhausted. You have so well got into the mind of someone who has to do it because blood is thicker than water. XX
Thankyou Isobel any feedback from yourself is welcome especially positive as I know all of your feedback is galvanised in candor.
I do write a bit of free verse I should dig it out and post it, but
god blyhmey
I love rhymey
Love you lots
Like Jelly Tots
Ged XXXXXXXXX
Great social comment here Ged. How many times do you see this pattern repeated? We are all tied to the mortgage macnine that drives us to work longer and harder. It's quite common to see grandparents who are way too old looking after young kids. Not good for them or the children they manage. I've told mine that there's now way I'll be doing it - but I've no doubt I'll get sucked in - cos at the end of the day, you do all you can to help your own.
'The push of a person who has to push on'
I like your dabble with unrhyming poetry - it says what you want to say in an uforced way. Free verse can be done without losing the poetry as your above line illustrates. I very much like the flow of the last verse also.
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Wez Jefferies
Wed 30th Jan 2013 19:40
Brilliant Ged. I think it's a scene many of us have looked at before and I love the way you portray it with such coldness.