Salford snowfall
Outside the third-floor window, snowflakes float
Sailing, then sinking in full formation
Frail frozen fleet, soon flattened underfoot
Failing, falling to its destination
Headlights, tail-lights flow from Salford station
Forgetting office facts and office files
Filing themselves away as suburban
Freed from the city by four or five miles
The snow, the shadows, lie in light / dark piles
This freezing season with its frosty coat
This frightened evening, white, black, tight-woven
On forlorn pavements, forgotten exiles
From frequent footfalls, I'll now plant my feet
Forlornly fleeing fate's final function
A sonnet about today's snowfall!
Helen Thomas
Tue 3rd Feb 2009 16:06
I love a bit of alliteration and I think the 'f' sound is perfect for a poem about snow with its associations with things like fluff and feathers.
I also liked the subtle internal rhymes of 'freezing season' and 'frightened evening' aswell as the echo between
'frozen fleet' and 'fleeing fate's'.
I find sonnets really difficult so respect anyone who can make them look so effortless, and to write one every day? That takes stamina!