Snow Marilyn
Snow Marilyn
Marilyn Monroe's
Body sculptured snow
Smiles bright white
And lies a bright
As white lies
Long ago.
Comments
Bit of a change in style for you, I think compared to some of your other stuff I've read but it is nice!
Hi Steve, should there be an extra "s" "and lies as bright"
you have managed to get a lot accross in these few lines. nice
winston
Pete Crompton
Tue 3rd Feb 2009 11:27
Steve
like the body sculptured snow especially
enjoyed.
Cheers Gus
Just changed the word 'Teeth' to 'Smiles' in the third line. Felt more natural and fitting.
Thanks for your comment.
Hi Steve
.....I LOVE IT !
Wow!....Blew my candle out for sure!
Well done
Gus
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sian howell
Wed 11th Feb 2009 11:54
The title is perfect for the poem and you have a way of putting across a tragic and poignant image all at once...thought it was very moving
Sian