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As if to care

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Was I the only one now on the beach?

She had stood behind me,

we had both waited- awkwardly.

She decided then to go,

I surmised- by the sound that

the soft tread of departure makes

on sand...

 

Sunsets care nothing for dimming shadows

nor waves sigh, that they must lap and fill

the printed pools left by feet.

How hard to turn and not look

back to what once was defined

by her gaze- her thinking that 

pulled all about- towards her,

as if to listen,

as if to care.

 

words and foto T Carroll

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Andy N

Fri 24th May 2013 12:45

i'm with ian on this piece, tommy. very very visual. can almost smell the waves here.

the last two lines particularly finish it well.

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Ian Whiteley

Thu 23rd May 2013 23:39

Good one Tommy - like this a lot - a real sense of the power of nature and the sorrow of leaving - it made me think that you could be talking about the sea behind you that you were missing rather than a lost love.
Really evocative and atmospheric
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