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Monkey on the park

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This was actually written by my 8yr old son, Aaron Hewitt. He wanted to blog and get your opinions. Thanks guys :-)

There's a monkey on the park

and he's hanging on the bars.

There's a monkey on the park

and he can see Mars!!!!!!!!!

 

There's a monkey on the park

and he's on the roundabout.

There's a monkey on the park

and he heard someone SHOUT !!

 

There's  a monkey on the park

and it's getting very late.

There's a monkey on the park

and he's gonna miss his date!!!

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Ged Thompson

Sun 24th Nov 2013 00:14

Brilliant!

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Ged Thompson

Sun 24th Nov 2013 00:14

Brilliant!

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 10th Aug 2013 15:46

Nice poem - has a lot of energy! I like it being "on the park" too. Nice monkey in the photo too!

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kath hewitt

Fri 9th Aug 2013 00:45

Thanks guys. Aaron is delighted with your comments and would like me to pass on his 'thank you' to you all.


Francine, yes, you are right, it is the same thing and You are not wrong about the monkey ha ha

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Steven Kenny

Tue 6th Aug 2013 18:33

This is cool, Aaron! :-) We want to see more poetry from you, little dude!!

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Francine

Tue 6th Aug 2013 18:28

Hi Aaron,

Not sure what 'on the park' means... here we say either 'at the park' or 'in the park' - if it means the same thing - otherwise, delightful and fun! Keep writing!

p.s I bet I know who that monkey was!

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Tue 6th Aug 2013 12:54

Very good, made me laugh. Keep up the good work dude!

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