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Smoke Rings

 

Summer daze,

drifting into falling gold

to finish.

We put away our home from home

of orange-brown acrylic,

leaving debris tucked in pockets.

Bottle-tops and old lip balms;

dirty skins and baccy strands;

ciggy filters; bits of grass;

fairy dust and magic eyes;

sugar made of salt.

Litter from the happy hours  

and many fields we danced in

under dark and diamond skies,

in the flaming of the days.

 

Airbed swapped for king-size pine.

Attic-bound, the pots and pans and dinky calor cooker.

Wellies tucked away to not be found in May to come. 

The noisy footpump stored along with extra poles and pegs,

all haphazard in the packing,

to be puzzled out next year:

which one goes with what goes where?

 

Spare room empties out the wood-smoke

memories of pleasure;

of friendships anchored in the dancing

flames of 5am.

Summerfun is packed away

to wait around the corner

of the winter,

malcontent,

blowing smoke-rings,

and never getting old.

 

 

◄ The Demise of the Library (or, Xanadu Deceased)

McGarrigle’s Glasgow ►

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Mike Hilton

Fri 29th Nov 2013 16:21

Brill Laura,
great picture painting and word sculpting reminds me of 'Woodstock times'.

Mike

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Ged Thompson

Fri 29th Nov 2013 01:48

I love this, its lovely!

Well done...

'ciggy filters; bits of grass;

fairy dust and magic eyes;'

These lines work so well together!!!!

Its got some lovely parts and its happy/ sad which is very hard to do in a poem, it has its own sort of mixed emotion.

as always.... as we say in scouse land

"FUCKING BOSS!"

<Deleted User> (9882)

Mon 18th Nov 2013 22:39

oh my Sainted Aunt!!..touch of modesty!go on,shatter the tank girl image I had of you,see if I care
-haha.x

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 18th Nov 2013 14:00

Anyone who has spent days and nights out "under
canvas" will identify with the feelings this
engenders. A reminder too that there are things
in life that return to give us simple joy.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 18th Nov 2013 10:13

Thanks Solar - shit hot? Nah. Just snapshotting that bittersweet moment. Ta though :)

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Sat 16th Nov 2013 21:20

Laura,my advice regarding this fabbo.Take the temperature of freshly laid shit(the temperature only,one hastily adds)and in comparing,you will find this 'top holer'not one fucking tad less hot!

So there! lol.x

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Laura Taylor

Fri 15th Nov 2013 10:36

Thanks Pete and Steve

It's not the greatest poem by any means, but just wanted to capture that bittersweet end-of-festival summer feeling. Now to get through the sodding winter...

Steve Smith

Thu 14th Nov 2013 17:22

"under dark and diamond skies ,
in the flaming of the days"
"friendships anchored in the dancing"

Great lines Laura.

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Pete Slater

Thu 14th Nov 2013 15:47

Who says she's a ranter? That's brilliant missus, paints a wordy picture of the end of festival summer, and brings back memories of sunburnt ears, misty muesli mornings, lost dogs and lost innocence ...... s-i-g-h ........

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