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COLD

There are days when nothing can comfort me, when my faith is shot to shit, and i drift so hopelessly, days..When the war is neither won nor lost, when the weapons are dropped, confused..As to why im fighting in the first place, expressionless face, no trace, there is nothing more daunting, than a silent battlefield, debating weither or not, to drop my shield, in the fear of a pre-emptive attack, empty, like ive fled my flesh for the day, to observe my confused ways, dear life...Im calling in sick today, as the snow falls down, cold...And miles away.

◄ SOMETHING TO BELEIVE IN....

SOMETIMES.. ►

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Daniel Hooks

Sun 31st May 2009 21:37

when your heart is a shield you definately don't want to lower it!
I found this poem powerful you have a way with words!

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Francine

Sun 12th Apr 2009 01:21

Very profound in many ways...

'there is nothing more daunting, than a silent battlefield,'
'like ive fled my flesh for the day, to observe my confused ways'

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Sat 11th Apr 2009 12:10

Hi Yosh,
if i'd had the pleasure of being able to read this 6 or 7 years ago, i would have known i wasn't alone and would have gained much comfort from that. Thankyou for posting this and as Mike says, it shows an advancement in the way it is written.
Keep it up. You just never really know who will make a connection through what you write so everything is worthwhile. Few of us are language and grammar perfect, it's all part of the learning process and the determination to succeed and improve for our own self preservation.

Janet.x

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Noetic-fret!

Fri 10th Apr 2009 21:42

Yosh Man, this is far more important and has much more to say than a couple of your previous rants. there are the shocklines backed up by subtlety, that many can relate too. Its engaging and quite an advancement in the way its written and its content from previous writings. This is far more like it, this is far more important. And WILL get you noticed.
Nice one
mike

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