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Flame

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Broken, battered, shattered, bruised, everything to abused. 
A faint, quiet, steady, pulse, with nothing left but remorse.
The blood hot, burning, boiling, in her veins, left nothing else to explain. 
Her heart was fried and almost gone, until he came along and fixed what was wrong. 
With a little tape, love, and compassion, that old heart would have an allergic reaction. 
Now it beats, loud, steady, and a little more clear, because she finally knew forever was near.

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Silence ►

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Kassandra

Wed 24th Sep 2014 20:52

Thanks guys!

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haridas7499

Wed 24th Sep 2014 20:31

hmmm nice work fried heart hahaha

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Andy N

Tue 9th Sep 2014 12:45

i really like the pacing and the detail in the words kassandra. would hate to try and perform it however as would be out of breath after the second line however.

excellent stuff

andy n

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Kassandra

Mon 8th Sep 2014 19:38

Thanks Tommy! When I write, random things kind of flow in a whirlwind of excitement.

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 8th Sep 2014 17:20

''...because she finally knew forever was near.'' that's neat Tommy

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