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the limpets kiss


soft, unlikely
unexpected

looked like leather
gentle
when protecting me.
he gathered courage together
and touched without an invite
inevitably
used the cover of night
to move
the haze of alcohol
proved
what he was really thinking
the bristle of his beard
a feeling I always feared
and such reservation confirmed
could not contain my wince and squirm
as I half turned, away
from the limpets kiss
my engagement should never have come to this
awkward came the fumbling
confident came his
always known
never wanted
finding difficulty in go away words
thought I was a bit of both
always a sloth
when it comes to experimentation
the persistent pick at the fact they know you
better than yourself
and that makes the strongest mind,
anxious, yet weak to find answers
I struggle to speak
so true intention never made clear
told him that
in school was shown
about holes and pegs
unaware of latents who beg
for something different
said I was never born that way
still holding on
where his ascending hands
soft as any mothers, looking sad
like a first son leaving home.


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DG

Sat 9th May 2009 18:43

Pierre, tu dois l'écrire. Ignorez-la, et dit-moi.

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Francine

Sat 9th May 2009 18:12

Il ne faut pas le faire!
C'est très bien écrit - il faut le relire pour comprendre...
tout est là...

Pete Crompton

Sat 9th May 2009 02:39

Mike, should I write the actual situation that this describes its very easy, can be done in one line. or will i spoil this?

does the revelation spoil it?
anyone?

Pete Crompton

Sat 9th May 2009 02:37

Mike
you are bang on the money!

Pete Crompton

Sat 9th May 2009 02:27

this is all correct!
I did not wish it understood as the moment itself was just that.
ambiguity is the best way for such an awkward moment of insecure certainty

the clues are there....................

thanks for all the interest on this one!

the subject situation interests me enough, or rather was potent enough to enable many connotations, i shall write a few versions of this moment, watch out for these.

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Isobel

Fri 8th May 2009 23:50

Not sure i can totally understand this poem - only surmise but perhaps you didn't really want it understood.

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Anthony Emmerson

Fri 8th May 2009 18:29

p.s. I like your cat - he looks extremely smug and contented! (In the way that only cats seem to able to manage!)

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Anthony Emmerson

Fri 8th May 2009 18:28

Hi Pete,

I'm not sure I've got this one fully yet - it seems like a poem that needs to sink in and be revisited a few times to fully appreciate. I loved the title - very apt and definitely drew me in. There are some cracking phrases and images here:

"finding difficulty in go away words"


"he gathered courage together
and touched without an invite"

"told him that
in school was shown
about holes and pegs
unaware of latents who beg
for something different"

and the closing lines:

"his ascending hands
soft as any mothers, looking sad
like a first son leaving home."

add a very delicate and poignant tenderness. I will return to re-read this several times.

Regards,

A.E.

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Francine

Fri 8th May 2009 07:00

Je comprends complètement ce que tu voulais dire par ce poème....
C'est triste, mais très bien écrit avec beaucoup de sensibilité...

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Gus Jonsson

Thu 7th May 2009 23:46

Hi Pete
I'm having a gender problem here ..??. perhaps it doesn't matter.. abused abuser and fear.. well handled..sensitive,
the bristle of his beard
a feeling I always feared
and such reservation confirmed
could not contain my wince and squirm
Gus

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Noetic-fret!

Thu 7th May 2009 23:14

Hi Pete, I like this poem for its intellect, sensitivity and insight. You can almost feel the anguish of a person misunderstood and taken for granted by a protagonist skilled in manipulation of a fragile. Although there is sensitivity there, i can almost feel the anger too, and ultimatley, a kind of resignation not necessarily wanted. Very thoughtful. Nice one blue.
Mike

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