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SWEEPING THE YARD

The world is giving up its tiny dead -

hair  carapaces   dust   come out of hiding

with the white flag of air,

drift slowly     surrender.

 

Lamentations to soften the scratch of feet.

 

In a bleak sun a broom signs the treaty

dust is on the march.

The arc begins,    mass grave swept

through forests of bristle

 

the sweeper content in the cheating of gravity.

 

Across the yard, she examines his progress

chiding him with a light curse.

 

The storehouse door is jammed open,

the dark interior a place of comfort.

 

 

◄ MISSISSIPI MUD PIE

LLECHWYDD SLATE MINE ►

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raypool

Sun 11th Oct 2015 12:20

Well really, thanks so much Stu. I'm always fond of your comments and I hope to please. I am trying to précis my thoughts more and more into a sort of dreamscape without overdoing the words. A skill that's worth trying for. Cheers.

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Stu Buck

Sun 11th Oct 2015 08:15

also the spacing of the lines is clever. forgot to add that.

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Stu Buck

Sun 11th Oct 2015 08:15

hi ray. this is fantastic. taking something so mundane and imbuing it with the depth and bombastic language of a historical battle is good writing indeed, and the last four lines take it from clever to powerful and humane. in my humble opinion this is the best thing you have written for a while (although i did love the 'matty groves' style love story.

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