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WHERE I LIVE

where I live      lanes converge

and gravel bottomed

like dried up streams are unadopted

with their tiny plots laid at random

backs to sides cobbled up

slates with tiles, scowling porches.

all a - sloping with their underground springs

slipshod and tacky

homely and sought after

now that envious eyes are cast

and the boards go up, staked through

the heart of where I love.

 

Where I live

I bought the bricks the earth

the sky above and in that

gully kitchen cook

and my whole foundations shook

while eternity looked down on me

and in the beating heart of what I see

 

and where I live is where i'll be

where my lanes converge

and my gravel bed

will lie beneath

 

my spirits' tread.

IT'S HARD TO FIND LOVE ►

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raypool

Thu 29th Oct 2015 10:29

Thanks Cynthia for the input. Where you live is important
and this is something you won't find on an estate agents flyer! cheers.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 28th Oct 2015 20:24

I'm with the comments here; especially enjoyed 'scowling porches'. Sometimes a 'spill-out' is marvellous, from who knows where. Don't ask. Just rejoice.

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raypool

Wed 28th Oct 2015 19:04

Thanks folks that you found favour with this one. Always nice to hear different reactions; a simple offering without any big ideas. Cheers .

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Stu Buck

Wed 28th Oct 2015 11:50

hello ray. yes im fine thanks, just keeping my distance whilst the negative energy (yes i am a hippy dippy im afraid) dissolves and the place becomes more pleasant.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 28th Oct 2015 10:11

Ooo I do like this - the crossing over of live and love, the significance of the home to the heart, and some beautiful sonics. 'gravel bottomed' - mmm.

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raypool

Tue 27th Oct 2015 22:49

Thanks Stu. I wrote this in double quick time , it poured out and I thought "what is this?" I'd been for a walk round in the dark and thought "what can I make of this?"

The whole thing felt very personal, and I'm delighted it hit a spot. I hope you're doing ok by the way...
Ray

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Stu Buck

Tue 27th Oct 2015 22:36

excellent. i had no idea where it was going until it got there (good thing) and i love this personal/spiritual thing. its the best way to suck a reader in. start out small and grow huge. this is excellent.

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