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once upon the sea of blissful awareness

i lie in a field and speak to god/godot about the

click clack asphyxiation cut throat cash flow

scarlet shame when each day dark side death

shadows and suicide note sunbeams wish wash

over my face paint hope and hatred i fly i lie i

cry hoarse please get me off this shit shot fucked

up ball of spinning hatred and insanity fuelled by

turpentine dreams and fat cat green chasing rapists

who unpick the seams of leather bound nightmares

with his story told by a million screaming children

coated black ash tar pit bones of ancient beings

ground down to memory  found to replicate the

mistakes made by our mothers picking apples and

stitches while we fawn over child porn and vapidity

 

caustic he screams at my psilocybin kid thoughts

light bulb notions fold me in two as weeping

earth washes away the nicotine stain burnt hair

smell of monopoly and biology, a dichotomy of

rotting leaves and linoleum garbage smoke then

skeletal trees punch forth from ashen lands reek

of he and thee no fear for life no fear for him

just pity and third reich leather belt strapped

tight around the arm of gaia spat on shot up with

fifty seven varieties of special sauce.

 

clouds of burnt flesh cherish the choice of one

last night as the penumbra of god/godot casts half cut

chain shots across my tallow skin silken fog forces

me to my knees before tightrope holocaust cancer

ward despair fucks deep his might strikes the chord

flies the flag while we hunt for opals in the dusk

of time and then the clock strikes and i wake.

 

 

 

 

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Stu Buck

Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:42

i have looked back as i said i would and i still like it a lot. i agree about the hammer blows, it is repetitive in its lilt and timing and overall i do think ive got a point across while keeping it dense and nightmarish. more importantly my wife likes it and she never likes anything. so whatever the outcome i have won!

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raypool

Mon 16th Nov 2015 17:10

Just to comment once more, Stu. It does have a persistent hammer blow effect for me and this gives the whole thing credibility. That insistence reminds me of Dylan Thomas in full flow, leaving little gaps for pondering - I think you have hit on a winner in that case.!!

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Stu Buck

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:18

thanks zach, how interesting that we posted similar poems at the same time. well, similar in some ways. i enjoyed your piece very much.

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Stu Buck

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:18

looking at it now, i think its one of the best things i've written. tomorrow, who knows!
its dense, partly recalling psychedelic experiences, partly expressing (as best i could) a conversation i had with god once. perhaps in a dream. i like the imagery, im happy with the flow and overall story and i think it stands up as a poem of some intent and regard. however, it may just be bollocks. thats the beauty of poetry. one mans trash etc! i could never scorn anyone for not liking a poem. poetry is so subjective that it wouldnt be right. thanks for reading and taking the time to comment. i will update you tomorrow as to whether i still feel its any good or not!

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raypool

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:09

I've read this Stu and tried to stay afloat on your sea - difficult with no known navigational aids. It's admirable, as you experiment in a tricky field and it does present a challenge. Are you happy with it? I can't be critical of its message although I think I know what you are getting at. with respect as always. Ray

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raypool

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:08

I've read this Stu and tried to stay afloat on your sea - difficult with no known navigational aids. It's admirable, as you experiment in a tricky field and it does present a challenge. Are you happy with it? I can't be critical of its message although I think I know what you are getting at. with respect as always. Ray

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John Bastard

Sun 15th Nov 2015 19:58

Stu you are my fucking spirit animal.
The walls on which the prophets wrote is cracking at the seams

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