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It's Only Words

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When

 

 You don’t say

You

 Love me

 

Your

Never words..

Can’t say

Won’t say

 

You

 Love me

Words

 

It’s ok

I don’t hurt

 

 

Words are only words

 

 

 

When

 You don’t say

You

Love me

 

Your always words

Whisper speak

Dream speak

 Love me

Speak

 

It’s ok

I won’t cry

 

I need to take more

 

Than words

 

 

 

When

You don’t say

 You

Love me

 

Phone words

Sex text

 

What ever next words

 

It’s ok

 I won’t sigh

 

You will always be there

 

 

 

When

You don’t say

You

 Love me

 

Good night

God bless

See you

In the morning

Words

 

 

It’s ok

I don’t hurt

 

You

Make my heart sing

 

It’s ok

I know

 You

Love me

 

I know

 You

Love me

 

I know

You

 Love me

 

 

 

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Jeff Dawson

Sat 4th Jul 2009 14:17

Ok Ros, enough of the sex text - will tell you next time I see you!!

Great stuff, nice work and a lovely surprise seeing you on here, nice change from that Johnsson bloke!

You'll be asking me for an open mic slot next! Hope so, Jeff X

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Sat 27th Jun 2009 09:45

I like it. For all the reasons below. Evocative, simple but structured. Congrats :)

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Dave Bradley

Fri 26th Jun 2009 14:42

Hi Rosalind
I too loved this poem. It teases the mind (and heart?) into filling in the gaps between the words from one's own experience. For me, one to come back to.
It's early days for me too on this site. My experience, like yours, is confined to a couple of open mic evenings. The scene is confusing isn't it (-;
Dave

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Thu 25th Jun 2009 14:29

Hi Ros, you little dark horse. :-)

I enjoyed your first attempt at poetry and can see where the inspiration came from from for the shape. In this case, i think it works well because of the subject matter.
Long, drawn out friendship and love and the mystery between them and the feelings they might want to hide or simply can't say.

I do love the quirky letters as it flows down towards the ending. ;-)

Well done.
Janet.x

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Gus Jonsson

Thu 25th Jun 2009 00:31

Well done Roz
Congrats on yer first poem...
Welcome to WOL look forward to more of your postings.
I am aware that this your first poem ... EVER???? and as such is a great leap.. however your poem , in my view stands shoulder to shoulder with any other on this site, and you should be very proud of yourself...well done
I love the echo structure...the poem has a nice feel...
Gus xx

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winston plowes

Wed 24th Jun 2009 23:48

nice post Rosalind. Winston

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Wed 24th Jun 2009 23:22



Good Evening Rosalind,
I love this poem , the message is so simple and recognised and so often heard as cry from the heart and sob into your pillow talk, so many many times before. Love is not the easiest of paths to choose.
A quite beautiful poem.
Augusta

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