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Male Bonding

Football is a game, played in two halves

identifiable by factions wearing coloured scarves

either round the neck in a conformist style

or tied round the wrist like a 70’s exile.

The weekly gathering of like minded folk

and tribal instincts that it evokes

generating emotion in the assembled masses

that transcends barriers and social classes

For 90 minutes they’re all the same.

Chasing adrenaline throughout the game

and the bond that ties them all together

does not depend on whether

the match was won, lost or drawn.

A pledge of allegiance was never sworn

to bond them all to their chosen team

they just share a vision, they just share a dream.

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Robert Mann

Thu 21st Jan 2016 19:23

Chris - my pleasure.
Rob

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Chris Briggs

Thu 21st Jan 2016 18:34

Rob, I don't mind any advice at all, it's always good to get another viewpoint on work and actually now that I have looked at it through your eyes, i understand exactly what you mean. I am going to edit it now. Thanks.

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Robert Mann

Thu 21st Jan 2016 14:54

Chris - I really like the concept of this piece but think it would have more flow with a bit of editing. Too many 'the's' for my mind makes it a bit staccato. Hope you don't mind me saying!
Rob

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